Tuesday, June 03, 2008

Sentinels' Message


I see that old army of mountains,
Standing guard at the horizon,
Some grown older and taller over the years;
With white heads they stand up looking down at the earth,
Making conversations with the gypsy clouds that wander.

Some clouds rest over their shoulders,
Giving them messages sent by their long lost brothers,
Who dwell in the other distant lands.
Taking down greetings and replies in return,
They roll them up into scrolls of thunderbolts as the peaks’ whisper.

Reading out news from lands far away,
About the distant landscapes
They hovered around while coming this way;
And telling tales that prevail there
Of nations and their battles that looked trivial from up there.

The powerful winds rushed against them
But seldom did they budge or tremble.
Without faltering or even moving a single inch,
Upright they stood, staring straight
Into the swirling ice storm’s eye.

The wind whistled mischievously and at times howled.
Going around them in circles on and on.
Teasing them slyly and striking them cruelly, they circled
With an impression they’ll turnaround and retreat.
But little did they know those sentinels won’t even retort.

For they stood unyielding with their feet set on the ground.
Yet they reached high and the limit was the sky.
Perhaps, they had a silent message to convey,
When you stand firm in faith,
You’ll scale heights and there’s no reason you’d fail.

19 comments:

Winnie the poohi said...

For they stood unyielding with their feet set on the ground.
Yet they reached high and the limit was the sky.
Perhaps, they had a silent message to convey,
When you stand firm in faith,
You’ll scale heights and there’s no reason you’d fail.

Lovely!!!!

rukhiya said...

Wonderful wonderful one from you!! The clouds, the dialogue,the message in the end!! Woof! Beautiful!!

Sarah Rahman said...

Wonderful!

Keep it up!

manu said...

When you stand firm in faith,
You’ll scale heights and there’s no reason you’d fail.

Indeed true

Awesome write!

nandhini said...

When you stand firm in faith,
You’ll scale heights and there’s no reason you’d fail.

Indeed true

Awesome write

Aman said...

Great symbolism. You're really good with metaphors. Lovely writing. Enjoyed it to core. Thanx for sharing.

Eli K said...

"Some grown older and taller over the years"

The power of time
Nobody can scape from...


:-]

*~*Sameera*~* said...

How true!Those who dare to stand against all odds are the ones who truly live.

Lovely poem :)

Amber Light said...

Very inspiring. Kudos for a superb piece of writing, the last stanza especially.

Dipa Uchil said...

Hey dats a beautiful write and the last two lines say it all or rather sums it all so perfect.
U make sure to convey sm msg thru ur work.Which is appreciative and so very influencing....Thanx

And keep scribblin always :)

MAN IN PAINTING said...

That was really cool.I wonder why nobody commented on it.I liked it.
Very good writing.
bye.

Indrajit said...

When you stand firm in faith,
You’ll scale heights and there’s no reason you’d fail

loved th way u brought th mesg ...
very poetic . mountain snvr loooked so intriguing unless u brought thm hre .... :) al th best ... and welll,ths is one of ur best wrks ...

Dolly Singh said...

All the elements are beautiful... the tall trees,the clouds........the entire scene n the use of metaphor,of course...
Loved it :)

smriti said...

loved it...especially this line..

Making conversations with the gypsy clouds that wander

The message reminded me of a hindi poem abt Himalayas...read it in std. 2 or 3 i guess :)

sunita said...

i really loved this one..........the sentinels had been the mute witness to the history of a nation...............just loved this write.......[:)]

Muse said...

Throughout,very profound pictorially; and inspiring too...
some strong words there convey the relentless-ness of either.
The last two lines-the clincher and I love it so...You know!
and there's no reason why I shouldn't like this one very much.

lavanya snigdha said...

beautiful imagery and personification...
:)

loved the message....

Priyanka Khot said...

The thing that I cannot help but admire is that in majority of your posts you end up imparting a positive outlook to the readers. In these times of utter mental chaos plaguing most of those in their difficult 20s your scribbles are a breath of fresh air.

Continue to stay positive. :-)

wandering soul said...

WoW! this is well written! i am not usually that interested in poetry. However i was reading this because you wrote about something that interests me a lot - The formidable Mountains. But the end was a pleasant surprise. I loved the way you included the message so effortlessly. The metaphor was perfect.

Will keep visiting. :)